Question Home

Position:Home>Poetry> A poem for a very special woman in my life. I hope you like it.?


Question:"war"


I am the hatred, sorrow and pain,
sickness, heartache, terror and rage.
Feed on the hungry and punish the poor,
forgiveness on Sunday is no cure for war.

Some call me liar, some call me thief,
some call me Satan, lord of deceit.
Your soul forever a childless toy,
my heart is rotten straight to the core.

Welcome to war, a permanent cure,
magic and mirrors, your colors are clear.
Back from the dead, you've made your own bed,
every lie has a cost, yours is a funeral fire.

How can you sleep at the end of your day,
burned, bruised and hated, you rolled the dice.
I have got mine and soon you'll get yours,
you'll live your life, burned, black and alone.


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: "war"


I am the hatred, sorrow and pain,
sickness, heartache, terror and rage.
Feed on the hungry and punish the poor,
forgiveness on Sunday is no cure for war.

Some call me liar, some call me thief,
some call me Satan, lord of deceit.
Your soul forever a childless toy,
my heart is rotten straight to the core.

Welcome to war, a permanent cure,
magic and mirrors, your colors are clear.
Back from the dead, you've made your own bed,
every lie has a cost, yours is a funeral fire.

How can you sleep at the end of your day,
burned, bruised and hated, you rolled the dice.
I have got mine and soon you'll get yours,
you'll live your life, burned, black and alone.

I don't think this is actually written "to" the lady per se, but I think the poem was written for something that she believes in strongly. It is a very strong, heartfelt, emotional poem. One of those poems that was written in the heat of the minute. Chew the eraser off. Great pen. Thanks for sharing.

Oh, I've been around a while remember? And you're welcome. Thanks for choosing my answer. Report It


Other Answers (10)




="shown">
  • smuckers luvs jiff's Avatar by smuckers luvs jiff
    Member since:
    February 19, 2008
    Total points:
    933 (Level 2)

    ="network">
  • Add to My Contacts
  • Block User

  • Well, if she's into that dark, cynical view of the world thing.

    Sounds so cool

    I like your work for the most part steve and you know that
    this one however is not one of my favs

    I like it.
    The rhythm could use some work.
    Nice:)

    umm steve is this really for a special woman? i don't seem to get it. i love the poem but i don't understand. i read another poem of yours dedicated to special woman and then i read this. totally opposite. well whatever. awesome poem though.

    She sounds very.....special.

    I liked it. Especially the last two lines. And the third stanza.

    Good job, as always.

    COOL! Great job on it :D

    War is war. Whether between thousands or two.

    this is pretty deep steve, however, it doesn't sound like it's written for someone very special to you........

    Uhhhhh... Dark Prince, I'm a little surprised by this poem. I thought it was about love since you mentioned it is for this special woman. But this poem, ok is a good poem, but for someone so special in your life? Mmmmm, not so "magnifique".