What do you think? By the Sea...?

Question:By the Sea

Sunlight dances on your surface,
as your waves crash the ground.
I can’t get enough of your beauty,
or your intoxicating sound.

I sit here lost in my thoughts,
with my knees up to my chest.
All I can do is sit and wonder,
why it’s with you I feel the best.

Please be honest, this is the first poem I have written in years...I am just getting back into it. Constructive criticism is very welcome :)

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: By the Sea

Sunlight dances on your surface,
as your waves crash the ground.
I can’t get enough of your beauty,
or your intoxicating sound.

I sit here lost in my thoughts,
with my knees up to my chest.
All I can do is sit and wonder,
why it’s with you I feel the best.

Please be honest, this is the first poem I have written in years...I am just getting back into it. Constructive criticism is very welcome :)

What a nice poem
for a first time in several years.
and someone getting back
into writing poetry.
One that second paragraph
you look relaxed

I like this poem. I also have a love for the sound of water. I like to watch running water flowing down a country creek bed. I love sitting on the edge of the ocean and watching the waves coming in and the surface rising and lowering. It is very calming. The poem also seems to be a symbol for the person that is the love of your heart and the closeness that you feel.

it is great,

hey Danny that's odd. I just enjoy sitting in a graveyard,listening to ravens caw,wolves howl,andwell other greveyard noises

The rhythm, rhyme and meter are awkward and jagged.

Though it may seem a bit presumptuous, I feel it should sound like this:
Sunlight dances on your skin
as your waves come to crash
I'm lost within your beauty
In the spray and the splash

I sit silently in my thoughts
With my knees tight to breast
And all I can do is wonder
Why it's only here I feel at rest

I know this isn't amazing either by any means, it just came to me.

In any case for being away from it for so long this isn't a bad start. Just try not to worry so much about the rhyming, give a poem time, if it's meant to work, it will.