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Position:Home>Poetry> Help me pass the time of day?Question:I serch I seek I seek to find I seek to find peace mind Yet silent contemplasion brings Sonudless scream Witch ehco and momeries wake I pray silentice break break. Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I serch I seek I seek to find I seek to find peace mind Yet silent contemplasion brings Sonudless scream Witch ehco and momeries wake I pray silentice break break. PUNCTUATION!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!... ugh. It's quite good except for the lack of punctuation and your spelling mistakes/typos serch = search peace mind = ??peace of mind?? contemplasion = contemplation sonudless = soundless momeries = memories silentice = silence? It has potential but it needs a lot of work on the grammar and spelling. I agree with the other answers; it has potential but needs lots of work on it. There is also a contradiction. You are looking for 'peace of mind', but you end by asking for the silence to break. Surely you should want the silence not to break? |