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Position:Home>Poetry> Comment on Poetry?Question:Memories Aren’t for the Faint of Heart The lines have been drawn And the ties have been broken The floor creaks with a familiar whisper As if screaming the agony of all the broken promises I try to forgive I try to forget But the truth of your lies Are always there to bring me back down to reality Why can’t I forgive Why can’t I forget Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Memories Aren’t for the Faint of Heart The lines have been drawn And the ties have been broken The floor creaks with a familiar whisper As if screaming the agony of all the broken promises I try to forgive I try to forget But the truth of your lies Are always there to bring me back down to reality Why can’t I forgive Why can’t I forget Its beautiful.. my only have one problem.. "But the truth of your lies Are always there to bring me back down to reality" You should delete some words... [The truth of your lies bring me back down to reality] hope this helps.. You have a talent !!! poetry needs to be more meaningful than that (in my opinion) but it is fairly well written. doesn't rhyme nt gr8 but gd yeh wow that was powerful..I could feel the emotion in it..very nice what????? Pretty good very from the heart and must be experience! its really depressing but gud imagery =) Great title. Seriously. Niiiice the metaphors were put in the right structure, this is a very familiar situation thay most people can relate to, and you created a way to make it into a poem. Its very nice you have talent. |