If It Were Halloween, Would This Be The Ulitmate Scary Poem?

Question:The Tale Of The Vampire

The tale of the Vampire
Goes like this,
But wants you hear it,
You will wish,
That the creature called Vampire
Would never exist.

The story begins,
Vampires are made,
Fearsome, Gruesome, Invincible,
Except at the stake.

Their fangs grew,
Their numbers improved,
for a bite from their mouth
Will change you.

Bloodthirsty they went,
And found their prey,
Killed only to be eaten
Was their game.

But then they were fought,
And they were killed,
Through their heart with that stake!

None were left,
None remained,
For that was a glorious day!

They are gone!
Or are they?
That question remains.

If the answer is yes,
Then they will come again.
If the answer is no,
Then live in fear.

The only advice I give you is
Fear the full moon,
For then they will appear.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: The Tale Of The Vampire

The tale of the Vampire
Goes like this,
But wants you hear it,
You will wish,
That the creature called Vampire
Would never exist.

The story begins,
Vampires are made,
Fearsome, Gruesome, Invincible,
Except at the stake.

Their fangs grew,
Their numbers improved,
for a bite from their mouth
Will change you.

Bloodthirsty they went,
And found their prey,
Killed only to be eaten
Was their game.

But then they were fought,
And they were killed,
Through their heart with that stake!

None were left,
None remained,
For that was a glorious day!

They are gone!
Or are they?
That question remains.

If the answer is yes,
Then they will come again.
If the answer is no,
Then live in fear.

The only advice I give you is
Fear the full moon,
For then they will appear.

yes that is the bes halloween poem I have read and I think that it is really good.

I think in the second line you mean but once you hear it.

It is a good poem. But maybe it could be improved.

i don't think it is that scary

Truthfully...not that scary. Scary requires detailed actions and suspense (in the moment), we are too removed from your descriptions.

not the scariest but i liked it imagine what life would be like if we did kno we had vampires around like that and had to seriously watch out for them

It's alright, but it could be better. Maybe if you took the same ideas and made it free form?

It's not scary but good I like vampires (or at least the shows I watch about them like Bloodties man I wish that came back :( )