What do you think of my latest poem? I have just this second finished it.?

Question:If I could

If I could, I’d do all I could for you;
I’d take your hand and we’d fly up to the sky;
We would settle up high upon the moon
Star gaze falling stars as they meet they’re end;
Snatch a handful of its trailing star dust,
This magical star dust does make your heart lust
Its all for you to use as you so wish,
No finer gift does exist.
The finest siesta you have ever had
We shall slide back down upon a rainbow
Entranced in such glee as free as can be;
A Kaleidoscope of colours we see.
If I could, this would be true.

Back down to earth we’d dive in the ocean;
I’d grow us mermaid’s fins we’d swim in motion
We’d go down deep and lie on the sea bed;
Eagle eye the sea creatures doing there thing
I’d let you touch a jelly fishes sting
because here with me you are invincible.
We’d see every species beneath the sea;
I’d make this un-miss able.
The greatest adventure you will ever have;
We’d swim back up upon a dolphin’s back,
With such euphoria running through our veins;
Light slowly appears glaring through the blue.
If I could, this would be true.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: If I could

If I could, I’d do all I could for you;
I’d take your hand and we’d fly up to the sky;
We would settle up high upon the moon
Star gaze falling stars as they meet they’re end;
Snatch a handful of its trailing star dust,
This magical star dust does make your heart lust
Its all for you to use as you so wish,
No finer gift does exist.
The finest siesta you have ever had
We shall slide back down upon a rainbow
Entranced in such glee as free as can be;
A Kaleidoscope of colours we see.
If I could, this would be true.

Back down to earth we’d dive in the ocean;
I’d grow us mermaid’s fins we’d swim in motion
We’d go down deep and lie on the sea bed;
Eagle eye the sea creatures doing there thing
I’d let you touch a jelly fishes sting
because here with me you are invincible.
We’d see every species beneath the sea;
I’d make this un-miss able.
The greatest adventure you will ever have;
We’d swim back up upon a dolphin’s back,
With such euphoria running through our veins;
Light slowly appears glaring through the blue.
If I could, this would be true.

awww i like this one too:)

Wow, love this poem! Thanks for sharing.

I think its beautiful =o] Someone is in love, no? ;o)

I like it! Very creative! Have you ever thought of makeing a book?

wow not even i could think of that in so little time
great poem love it : - )

Very nice imagery.
Nice work:)

It's really good,makes you picture it all in your head. It would make a good song. Good luck with it -hope nobody steals it from you.

I could see earthy colors and feel their feelings...nice poem.

There were glimmers...

i liked the poem, you have more? you would like to share