What do you think of my poem? Do you think I am too disturbed or am I ok?

Question:Everthings dark, everythings ruined
It just went wrong
Maybe I'll die of the flu

No body cares and everyone stares
What am I supposed to do?

I was born as some type of infection
An impotent worm without an erection
I'm sure this will end
With a lethal injection

I have a nice girl
She wants me to open the door
But how can I do this,
For a cheap little whore?

Everyone cries and everyone dies
They think they are smart
But eat their own eyes

Should I go south and sit on a beach?
Put a gun in my mouth and blow out my teeth?

Now I'm not too smart
I am no genius
But I am bright enough
Not to suck a man's penis

I like to trip and I like to smoke pot
Why do I do it?
I just like it a lot

Now back to my girl
I mean her no harm
But when she chatters too much
I feel like breaking her arm

Life is so fragile
It can turn on a dime
You think things will last
Then things are not fine

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Everthings dark, everythings ruined
It just went wrong
Maybe I'll die of the flu

No body cares and everyone stares
What am I supposed to do?

I was born as some type of infection
An impotent worm without an erection
I'm sure this will end
With a lethal injection

I have a nice girl
She wants me to open the door
But how can I do this,
For a cheap little whore?

Everyone cries and everyone dies
They think they are smart
But eat their own eyes

Should I go south and sit on a beach?
Put a gun in my mouth and blow out my teeth?

Now I'm not too smart
I am no genius
But I am bright enough
Not to suck a man's penis

I like to trip and I like to smoke pot
Why do I do it?
I just like it a lot

Now back to my girl
I mean her no harm
But when she chatters too much
I feel like breaking her arm

Life is so fragile
It can turn on a dime
You think things will last
Then things are not fine

Terrific. I think definately it is as disturbed as you say, but it is also a grief and this is the shinning light of your soul.

Great.

I don't know anyone who's "ok" and even fewer who would want to be. As for your poem, it's a little bit disconnected but there's some great stuff in there. The last verse; truly great and I do mean TRULY great!

lmao, ok the last one was just funny

but rhe rest of its good. You're a pretty good writer

You're not sick, you just see reality unlike the rest of this stupid planet, faking their hapiness every day of their lives and throwing money away on uggs and whatnot and then ending up at crackwhores in the end :] life's amazing aha

wow i really loved your poem it was great.i just wrote a dark poem too but damn yours is so good.I love Dark Poetry and this is dark and it's totally off the hook good.Keep writing as your talented at writing poetry.

Childish, juvenile, and ridiculous...I enjoyed it.

The title should be "Issues"....lol...