My only solo poem for the day. How do you like it.?

Question:"emo"

Is it not just possible,
that I just got bored.
I just might no longer care,
but still bleed to the core.

Why did you go play me,
cold as Winter's ground.
You knew that I loved you,
the tears of one more clown.

I begged you and I pleaded,
all that you ignored.
My heart is barely beating,
lying prone and on the floor.

You might call this emo,
for once I just don't care.
This is my life everday,
The Dark Prince is on call.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: "emo"

Is it not just possible,
that I just got bored.
I just might no longer care,
but still bleed to the core.

Why did you go play me,
cold as Winter's ground.
You knew that I loved you,
the tears of one more clown.

I begged you and I pleaded,
all that you ignored.
My heart is barely beating,
lying prone and on the floor.

You might call this emo,
for once I just don't care.
This is my life everday,
The Dark Prince is on call.

This isn't bad DP, but it is not quite up to your usual standards. The rhythm is a bit halting and I had to change up while reading, but it is still a good piece. There is no way I'd consider it to be a bad poem, but I do know you can do it better too. After all, I've been watching you work. Write on.

I though Micheal Jackson was creepy....

i like it. its cool.

you will probably like my poem too, it has the same vibe:

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Awesome!!

**** all the emo haters.

The Dark Prince rules!!!

spot on mate! youre like me - write poems about personal pain - i find it helps!! waheyy - im not the only one then!

Were you referring to that "tickle me emo " thing from Sesame St.?

oh that was "Elmo" sorry.

Why does the Elmo doll always say "Elmo not ticklish THERE"?

JUST HAVING FUN WITH YOU!

but i still think Elmo is creepy! "emo", however, always makes me think of cute little skatepunks...

i think it was good :)

i've had the chance to read other poems of yours and i'd say i like this one the least. you have done better, it sounded forced but never the less its poetry

And just what is wrong with emo?!

much of the poem is completely unrelated to the point, it seems as if you merely took phrases from random "emo" poems and put them together

if you are trying to tell people that your views and feelings are actually deep and meaningful, try writing about more than pain; if you find yourself unable to express anything without a generic listing of seemingly meaningful phrases, then I can't see you being any better than the mindless drones of "normal" people

Very good! I like the way you get into your poetry.