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Position:Home>Poetry> Luver to Lover?Question:A different style for me. Comments? Luver to Lover I'm telling you I luv you but you ain’t gave nothing back. This is who I am, splintered and real. Why can't you see? Your eyes always moving dreaming of places far with carpets and cars and toys galore. But I am here, I am real, I am your rock. But you walk, look away and move away. Don't you dare turn around, I'm talking to you! Time you figur’d what you need cause I'm moving on. I have my dreams and ain’t nothing going to stop me! Splintered lives no more, I'm still going and I ain’t stopping no more. That’s right…no more! Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: A different style for me. Comments? Luver to Lover I'm telling you I luv you but you ain’t gave nothing back. This is who I am, splintered and real. Why can't you see? Your eyes always moving dreaming of places far with carpets and cars and toys galore. But I am here, I am real, I am your rock. But you walk, look away and move away. Don't you dare turn around, I'm talking to you! Time you figur’d what you need cause I'm moving on. I have my dreams and ain’t nothing going to stop me! Splintered lives no more, I'm still going and I ain’t stopping no more. That’s right…no more! Very heart-breaking! Broke me down to tears... If music is the food of love play on . Well done! You've captured my feelings on more than one occasion. "No more!" - I agree. "But I am here, I am real, I am your rock. But you walk, look away and move away. Don't you dare turn around, I'm talking to you!" i felt like in those lines you REALLY got angry.. and it's good.. the poem started a little calm, not too calm of course.. and little by little the degree of anger bcz of heartbreak i'm sure got higher and higher.. and i love the way you ended the poem! it was perfectly done! you didn't calm things at all, and that worked out great for this poem! nicely done! i liked it simple yet it says everything This can't be the end. There has to be a response from the other. What a great work. I would luv to hear the response though *hint* *hint* omg that is deep |