Comments on my poem, If roses grow in heaven?

Question:If roses grow in heaven
Please lord send me down eleven
For I have one that I found
That is perfect nice and round

It happened down this trail
When some birds began to wail
They were guiding me along
By the rhythm of their song

They led me to this spot
Was it fate, or was it not
And I surely had to say
That it was my lucky day

I found it near a weed
Where you surely placed the seed
And from the morning dew
It got its moisture, so it grew

But the day was getting late
And I thanked you for my fate
And if in heaven there’s a vase
Can you send it to my place

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: If roses grow in heaven
Please lord send me down eleven
For I have one that I found
That is perfect nice and round

It happened down this trail
When some birds began to wail
They were guiding me along
By the rhythm of their song

They led me to this spot
Was it fate, or was it not
And I surely had to say
That it was my lucky day

I found it near a weed
Where you surely placed the seed
And from the morning dew
It got its moisture, so it grew

But the day was getting late
And I thanked you for my fate
And if in heaven there’s a vase
Can you send it to my place

By FAR the best poem I've ever read on here!!!!!
It got me exploring all your other poems and I now have you as a favorite place to visit!!!

I love your poetry!!! Keep writing! You truly have a gift!

Great opening three stanzas then I felt disappointed as to how you developed the poem. Your fourth stanza also deviated from your pattern of 6,7,7,7. This has potential, perhaps its just the way I am reading it.

That truly is a magnificent poem. Great work, lovely rhyming but not just for the sake of rhyming a really lovely story being told with great structure.
5 star poem. You should try to get published or enter some poetry contests. I do and you have what it takes.
You win cash prizes.

That's a wonderful poem - really. It's amazing! Keep writing; you definitely have talent.

XOXO,
Laurie

thats really good . u did a great job at rhyming. u should post it on poetry.com :)