Ok, this is not mine but, my husbands poem, please, let us know what you think &

Question:As Time Passes

As time passes,
I sit here and wonder
Is this all there is?
Is this my life?
The life
I envisioned for myself?

As time passes,
I sit here
and retrace
the footsteps of my past
trying to find the place
I went off coarse

As time passes,
I sit here and watch
my hair turn
from brown to silver
and I wonder if there were
something I could change

As time passes
I sit here and watch my kids
playing with their kids
and it makes me wonder,
that if I could’ve changed
my life when I thought my life went wrong

I would not have
all these wonderful
memories
and I realize,
as time passes
I would not change a thing...

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: As Time Passes

As time passes,
I sit here and wonder
Is this all there is?
Is this my life?
The life
I envisioned for myself?

As time passes,
I sit here
and retrace
the footsteps of my past
trying to find the place
I went off coarse

As time passes,
I sit here and watch
my hair turn
from brown to silver
and I wonder if there were
something I could change

As time passes
I sit here and watch my kids
playing with their kids
and it makes me wonder,
that if I could’ve changed
my life when I thought my life went wrong

I would not have
all these wonderful
memories
and I realize,
as time passes
I would not change a thing...

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I love this...very nice. Tell your husband he has a lot of talent!

last line of stanza 2 you mean course.
second to last line of stanza 3 you mean was instead of were.

I like it a lot. It needs some work in the correct english department. Verb tense and a bit of editing here and there but it is a nice poem and has a good feeling to it.

Sweet and memorable

note...it should be "off course" not "off coarse"
its good, but some parts dont quite flow. nice way to wrap it up. perhaps "something i could have changed" works better?
it's very self reflective though which is nice

Tell hubby that Country Girl liked his poem! There are a couple of grammatical errors but they have been mentioned by others. It is written from the heart,and for me that goes a long way. I'm never fond of poetry that leaves me with a cold feeling. This is nice because it reflects life's experiences.

Hmmm...it's one of those poems tat everyone can relate. It has very good visual.

VERY interesting! VERY interesting!

Peace!

reminds me of a country song.

not badatall.

I like it. It sounds like words alot of us can relate to. Good Job!!

i like it