A poem I wrote in answer to a question - critiques welcome!?

Question:Music...
by Victoria Tarrani ((c) 0803.20)

Music soothes my soul
it takes me to the past
I drift in a fog of tomorrows
it makes me laugh and dance
and I feel the beat
that starts in my feet
caresses my legs
like soft satin sheets
I lose myself in the notes
or am thrown quickly into
a raging sea of voices
and running and
chasing a dream
that was so close
I felt its breath
a whisper across my neck.
It lifts the poetry
that lingers inside
into full bloom.
~~~
aka Tori or torit -- all one in the same, but when I post I use the copyright symbol and my full name.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Music...
by Victoria Tarrani ((c) 0803.20)

Music soothes my soul
it takes me to the past
I drift in a fog of tomorrows
it makes me laugh and dance
and I feel the beat
that starts in my feet
caresses my legs
like soft satin sheets
I lose myself in the notes
or am thrown quickly into
a raging sea of voices
and running and
chasing a dream
that was so close
I felt its breath
a whisper across my neck.
It lifts the poetry
that lingers inside
into full bloom.
~~~
aka Tori or torit -- all one in the same, but when I post I use the copyright symbol and my full name.

you just describe music the best way possible so that even a deaf person would understand what it can do!

very nice!

Nice

song lyrics.

Nice

ok?

Very nice. Very accurate, too!
Be easier to read, if you could find a place to break it, so it was in 3 parts.

Thats Be-u-ti-full..
I like it =]=]
I can relate to this..
x

I think you have a good start, but tail off midway. Probably could get a lot out of the subject given some more time working on it

omg. thats so beautiful! i love it. you must really have a passion for music (and poetry!)

i like it! ever1 plz read my latest poem....thx in advance =)
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Hi. A very nice broken cadence. Love the 'whisper'.

The questionable answer is really answerable if you could question the answer to unquestionable question & answer portion== Answer ==

A) Jesus
B) Sex

tht is really good x

I like the poem it was very good, i think u should be a poet! You can really imagine it, great!

Nice. Just this one verse:

"I lose myself in the notes
or am thrown quickly into"

could flow better.

Nice Tori,It paints a picture in my mind.check out my song lyrics on my blogs page on my 360 page and tell me what you think.Keep in mind I'm not a professional and I keep my best pieces to myself with the fear of plagiarism.

Very nice. Satin sheets? Drifting on a fog of tomorrows? Stop! :)

very sweet dear ! good write ! tb..

i like it

Nice job. I loved the way you have put that together,