It's kinda bad, but I thought I'd see what people think anyways.?

Question:so theres this girl
who brings the sparkle
back to my eyes

she plucks my heart
from deepest depression
to bring me back to life

so theres this girl
shes so different
shes so alive

so theres this girl
who can brighten my day
and save me from death

so theres this girl
who i think i love
but, i try to convince

myself not. but
everytime I see her
face, her smile

that twinkle in her eye
her contagious laugh
it starts all over again

death starts over again
growing from inside
until im lost in sorrow

than i talk to
that amazing girl
the one with a shining heart

the one with the
contagious laugh
the one i love, until
it starts again

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: so theres this girl
who brings the sparkle
back to my eyes

she plucks my heart
from deepest depression
to bring me back to life

so theres this girl
shes so different
shes so alive

so theres this girl
who can brighten my day
and save me from death

so theres this girl
who i think i love
but, i try to convince

myself not. but
everytime I see her
face, her smile

that twinkle in her eye
her contagious laugh
it starts all over again

death starts over again
growing from inside
until im lost in sorrow

than i talk to
that amazing girl
the one with a shining heart

the one with the
contagious laugh
the one i love, until
it starts again

I think it's pretty good. I'm not very good at writing poetry but that came from the heart and that's all that matters in good poetry.

Pretty good

that's such a cute poem. give it to the girl :)

might want to work on the flow, but otherwise, i loved it, i envy the girl you wrote it for.

Awful.

Look, there's a million poems about girls. So, if you're going to write another poem about a girl it has to be special. This one is not.

It's sweet...I can really tell that it came from the heart. I think that you should give it to the girl...you don't have to be the best poet ever in order to touch a girls' heart.