Opinions.........?

Question:Fear me and my intellect nature
with a winning smile, concealing you nerve.
I'll sneak up on you, you deserve
to get waves so deep, order your waiter.
The bird's too smart to catch the worm,
but you are nothing so alike,
to something pure and flawlessly right.
No soil deserves the fern.
Human minds hold systems per say,
greed and retardation rotting,
with psychology and ink blotting
screaming through papers all day.
Deer will suffer from insomnia
medications will fill your air
Be cool and not just care
The truth will be vice versa
I am the ventriloquist,
and my words won't come from me.
They will speak through you,
from the words that you will read.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Fear me and my intellect nature
with a winning smile, concealing you nerve.
I'll sneak up on you, you deserve
to get waves so deep, order your waiter.
The bird's too smart to catch the worm,
but you are nothing so alike,
to something pure and flawlessly right.
No soil deserves the fern.
Human minds hold systems per say,
greed and retardation rotting,
with psychology and ink blotting
screaming through papers all day.
Deer will suffer from insomnia
medications will fill your air
Be cool and not just care
The truth will be vice versa
I am the ventriloquist,
and my words won't come from me.
They will speak through you,
from the words that you will read.

WOW!

Quite the abstracts in writing my friend, wickedly deep and totally all your own <3

I'll be keeping an eye on your works *^_^*

Well done @)~>~

Well, I guess it's okay. I prefer a totally different style of poetry, though. Deep and painful, that's what I like. Also stuff that I can relate to... but that's just me. I don't really get this poem, no offense. Very confusing!!!!!!!

Its a bit of a mess. Retardation rotting? Deer with insomnia? I get you're going for some abstract imagery but its a little too oddball to fit in with what I perceive to be your theme.

There's some basic spelling and grammar:

"per se" not "per say"

"Your nerve" not "you nerve"

"The truth will be vice versa" the noun vice versa isn't used this way - its a poor line.

That's just crazy talk.

Trying to prove that my conclusions should be more drastic, eh?

I know your works.