What do you think about my natural poetry?

Question:The sun comes up this morning
The birds begin to sing
Their voices ring through the evergreens so brilliantly
From the forest the sounds I hear go like this
The Rush of a river
The Pound of hooves
The Splashes from the fish in a pond
The Rustle of the leaves on these ancient trees
The Patter of the rain on the ground
Then Up comes the moon an the millions of stars
Ending a perfects day

* A bit feminine for a guy writing poetry but who cares

* Tell me your opinions, I don't care for poetry but I want some opinions before I quit...after I just started lol

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: The sun comes up this morning
The birds begin to sing
Their voices ring through the evergreens so brilliantly
From the forest the sounds I hear go like this
The Rush of a river
The Pound of hooves
The Splashes from the fish in a pond
The Rustle of the leaves on these ancient trees
The Patter of the rain on the ground
Then Up comes the moon an the millions of stars
Ending a perfects day

* A bit feminine for a guy writing poetry but who cares

* Tell me your opinions, I don't care for poetry but I want some opinions before I quit...after I just started lol

It needs some revisions but has some good visual .....

ok well it should be "and the millions..." and "ending a perfect day" i suppose there are typos. it's decent. fourth line a bit awkward, it could flow better. ancient trees is nice imagery

It sounds like a you can envision nature by reading it

Not amazing.

There's a million poems about this same subject. Many of them are indeed amazing. So, if you're going to write poetry about this subject know that you are in company of greatness and think twice before you add average or poor work to that canon.