I have had a long day I finally wrote this poem after a trying day. How is it.?

Question:"love lost"

I came to you on wounded knees,
the wind came howling, bending trees.
This moment I had come to doubt,
my heart beats fast, I long to shout.

That longing look deep in your eyes,
it is that look, I need, my prize.
Silently you grasp my hand,
around my wrist a silver band.

I feel your heart, mine skips a beat,
across the room, I feel your heat.
I'm lost inside this world so pure,
a glance my way, your only lure.

Rising up, I long to meet your lips,
my hands rest gently on your hips.
That single kiss that we once shared,
in pained regret, we should have dared.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: "love lost"

I came to you on wounded knees,
the wind came howling, bending trees.
This moment I had come to doubt,
my heart beats fast, I long to shout.

That longing look deep in your eyes,
it is that look, I need, my prize.
Silently you grasp my hand,
around my wrist a silver band.

I feel your heart, mine skips a beat,
across the room, I feel your heat.
I'm lost inside this world so pure,
a glance my way, your only lure.

Rising up, I long to meet your lips,
my hands rest gently on your hips.
That single kiss that we once shared,
in pained regret, we should have dared.

It is an amazing poem. You are a very good writer and I suggest you keep it up! In the last stanza though the first line doesn't fit in with the rhythm of the rest of the poem, but besides that it is wonderful!

I like the artistic phrases but it left me a little confused overall. But then I'm easily confused.

Sounds good to me!

amazingggggggg. i wish i was that poetic.

WOW!!!

OMG, OMG, OMG, u r soooooooooooo good!!!

I wish I could write like that.

A sense of loss, there is no doubt. I like it a lot.

I like the title and the poem, the rhyming couplet scheme works well for you, and makes a good read. I like the form, the rhythm, and the rhyme, but mostly I like what you have said. It shows that there is someone out there we all regret not daring to be with. The one who got away. Well done.

your wicked can you look at myn

One of your better ones, I agree with Dondi

I really really like the poem. I can feel the emotions, and I especially like the last two lines.

But I think the title should be changed. I think your poem deserves a better one.

As always, I am moved by the feelings that this poem radiates. And as always I enjoy your writing.

Keep up the great work and know that you do have people out there that care.

you have succeeded again