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Question:I am serious about this. I write to just write. I thought of this 1 day:
Make it Stop
Daddy,
Just make my suffering stop.
Make the pain stop.
Put me out of this type of misery.
Make it stop!
Make everything that ever happened,
Unhappen.
Unwind our secrets,
Set them free.
Before I leave this earth Daddy,
Tell everyone of my horrible past.
And tell everyone my secret,
And why I exactly died.
It wasn’t my time, no it wasn’t.
Defiantly not my time.
It was her time.
But I didn’t let her go.
So I went.
But I didn’t know it would be this painful.
Just make everything stop, Daddy.
Please, Daddy
Just make it stop.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I am serious about this. I write to just write. I thought of this 1 day:
Make it Stop
Daddy,
Just make my suffering stop.
Make the pain stop.
Put me out of this type of misery.
Make it stop!
Make everything that ever happened,
Unhappen.
Unwind our secrets,
Set them free.
Before I leave this earth Daddy,
Tell everyone of my horrible past.
And tell everyone my secret,
And why I exactly died.
It wasn’t my time, no it wasn’t.
Defiantly not my time.
It was her time.
But I didn’t let her go.
So I went.
But I didn’t know it would be this painful.
Just make everything stop, Daddy.
Please, Daddy
Just make it stop.

10. You're idea was clear, yet with a mystery towards it. It shows that this girl died for something she believes in, i really like it, that "vibe" and the way you write is very interesting and has a cool edge towards it, i think is amazing, you should make a sort of site, and maybe publish them? Maybe write for Chicken Soup?? <33ed it..

Hala

10!! that was pretty good but i don't really understand what you are talking about. =I But anyways i love it!