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Question:years from now will i ever get out/
no doubt lifes a b**ch/
still motha earth continues fighting feeding ma mouth/
2 jobs supporting a family a six/
clouds sun or depression,
alone love can never seem to leave her own creations/
no matter the session/
from war to unforgivable past acts to presence/
ma piece of heaven/
stressing as i proceed on paving over her cracked cement /
depressing, but years from now....
no hope cause 0f peace n' respect/

thanks in advance!

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: years from now will i ever get out/
no doubt lifes a b**ch/
still motha earth continues fighting feeding ma mouth/
2 jobs supporting a family a six/
clouds sun or depression,
alone love can never seem to leave her own creations/
no matter the session/
from war to unforgivable past acts to presence/
ma piece of heaven/
stressing as i proceed on paving over her cracked cement /
depressing, but years from now....
no hope cause 0f peace n' respect/

thanks in advance!

its good but change the spelling on some words,

NICE!!!!

JK, that sucked.

Moronistic ramblings by an idiot.

that was really good. it brought a tear to my eye. lol

i disagree with anyone who dissed this poem. First of all i commend you or even putting it on here. I think that although its not a masterpiece it is a touching story and thanx for putting it in here. Like the one kid said if you changed some of the spellings you would get more respect poetically but maybe they are spelled the way they are for a reason. Anyways thanx for the poem it was great im looking ofrward to more maybe