Another by me i like this one even tho it came from a painful part of my life?

Question:You & I

I don't know what to think,
I'm throwing up in the sink.

My insides are coming out,
What the hell is that all about?

I know you said you loved me,
I know you said you cared.

I had the same damn feelings,
Why did I have to share?

You fuc*ing wrecked my life,
I thought you said you cared!
Where the hell did you go?

When I needed you there.......

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: You & I

I don't know what to think,
I'm throwing up in the sink.

My insides are coming out,
What the hell is that all about?

I know you said you loved me,
I know you said you cared.

I had the same damn feelings,
Why did I have to share?

You fuc*ing wrecked my life,
I thought you said you cared!
Where the hell did you go?

When I needed you there.......

me, likee

i have one too.

this bit of poison
i give back to you.
the gift that you gave me ,
and those lies
so untrue.
you stabbed me in the back
then stepped on my heart .
loves not the same
my souls ripped apart.

u f***n je*k

the end.
i'm not a poet .....but i feel your pain. its things like this that help us realize the right and true things that have come along or have yet to come our way! cheer up.

Bit sad and morbid, but who doesn't feel that way sometimes? Listen to some Three Days Grace, Crossfade or Nickleback (just to name a few), it also helps. lol

real nice....and touching...but honestly speaking you don't need to use the swear words....they convey the same meaning without them.....infact better...good poem..

I agree that the use of cuss words just ruins the poem for me anyway. While I understand you need to get your feelings out you can express them in a better way especially if you're gong to put it up in a forum such as this.

this is a abruptly composed 12 line script done in a fit of anger, too much emotion overwhelms the writing so much that it resembles a page from a B-grade punk rock band lyrics... the first two lines are wonderfully characteristic of lyrics from a rock band for it surprises and invites the reader into the writer's strangest momentary impulse of emotions...

It would do better as a song. The obscenities have no place in poetry. Poetry is more than lines that rhyme.