New Poem... Anger ish ness?

Question:To All Of You

To All of You
Who think that your perfect
pity on you
I think you know that your wrong
preppy and/or plastic
thats who you are
untalented jerks
who think they will go far
Pity on you
when no mercy will come
because you were so full of yourself
your so full in your head
so full of yourself
i wish youd drop dead

not much i know.... it is actually something i wrote a while ago

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: To All Of You

To All of You
Who think that your perfect
pity on you
I think you know that your wrong
preppy and/or plastic
thats who you are
untalented jerks
who think they will go far
Pity on you
when no mercy will come
because you were so full of yourself
your so full in your head
so full of yourself
i wish youd drop dead

not much i know.... it is actually something i wrote a while ago

I think anger is a good emotion but it is very powerful so a good poet must learn to restrict/allow his/her emotions when crafting his/her poem. Your anger got a little too powerful for you to handle so it messed up the poem. The line: "I wish you drop dead" isn't poetic. There must be some other poetic way of saying it.

that was good in some ways but gat in others

wow
u sound like a nerd who hates all popular ppl
lol

i like it =]