I started to write this today during ushistory. do you think its a good begining

Question:He was her drug. She was addicted.
She thought she was his drug too,but his heart rate and breathing slowed down and his blood pressure dropped every weekend. that was not what she predicted.

One saterday it had been all fun and games.
Weather it was those stimulants making you feel more awake or those depressants making you feel more relaxed
you took it to far, becuase it left more than a scar.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: He was her drug. She was addicted.
She thought she was his drug too,but his heart rate and breathing slowed down and his blood pressure dropped every weekend. that was not what she predicted.

One saterday it had been all fun and games.
Weather it was those stimulants making you feel more awake or those depressants making you feel more relaxed
you took it to far, becuase it left more than a scar.

Too much typos. Not in line/stanza form. Good thing you used imagery. Try to stay away from cliches.

You did one thing right, at least you know that poems don't have to rhyme.

wow that sounds really amazing. keep going.

I'm sorry but would it be wrong to predict someone dies later in the poem thats what it seems like to me