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Those tingly feelings were once mine to possess,
I'd get chills down my spine, sensations never less,
awkward and unusual, fresh and unknown,
I had never felt like that before, those feelings I had never known.

Sweet sensations of yesterdays, a memory is all that remains,
still vibrant and expressive, my emotion I must contain.
Your finger once peirced my arm, and I quickly lost my breath,
my insides were set ablaze, a feeling so simple, and yet so intense.

A flush to the face, a feeling forever safe,
all lost in the present, only to be erased,
can that feeling ever reapear, were those times just the last,
is it forever gone, is it worth it to think about the past?

My problems are my own, I'm the cause of my distress,
my weaknesses are my flaws, and my flaws are chains intense,
locked to the floor, longing always for more,
my memory is fading, it's slipping right through those mortal doors.


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Tingly

Those tingly feelings were once mine to possess,
I'd get chills down my spine, sensations never less,
awkward and unusual, fresh and unknown,
I had never felt like that before, those feelings I had never known.

Sweet sensations of yesterdays, a memory is all that remains,
still vibrant and expressive, my emotion I must contain.
Your finger once peirced my arm, and I quickly lost my breath,
my insides were set ablaze, a feeling so simple, and yet so intense.

A flush to the face, a feeling forever safe,
all lost in the present, only to be erased,
can that feeling ever reapear, were those times just the last,
is it forever gone, is it worth it to think about the past?

My problems are my own, I'm the cause of my distress,
my weaknesses are my flaws, and my flaws are chains intense,
locked to the floor, longing always for more,
my memory is fading, it's slipping right through those mortal doors.

Silver...you've got talent just waiting to be polished!!!! This one is good....there are places where your words could be more descriptive...nontheless, this is very good!

Send me a message......I have a copyright on 'chatting' and this is covered by it!

wow, did you make that up yourself? thats beautiful. you should make it into a song, like colbie calliat did. that would be soo cool!

You capture a moment and sometimes moments are there to be remembered how it is to be alive

Great job, its a very touching poem..

That is really good. I don't understand poetry but I can understand this. It works just as well if you read it from the bottom to the top. The last verse is what caught my eye.

I like this poem even though it could use a bit of work. I think it's the meter that is off. You have talent and I think you could be a good poet. Work on it some more.