What do you think of my second poem?

Question:I have only written less than 5 poems in my life. Here is the second one I post in YA.

I am searching for a hobby these days. Do you think I can write poems as a hobby. Will it worth doing so?

Here is the poem

My thoughts of you are rolling like loops
I see you always even in my snooze
Your smile is similar to tulip blooms
I see two swans, through your two boobs

My thoughts of you all end with a sigh
I see my child at the depth of your eye
Don't you see or am I not a guy
I know love is a thing, -- that can't buy

I am so certain that I will win
I can blow up things that can intervene
I will be happy cause I have my queen
I will be with you like a true king

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I have only written less than 5 poems in my life. Here is the second one I post in YA.

I am searching for a hobby these days. Do you think I can write poems as a hobby. Will it worth doing so?

Here is the poem

My thoughts of you are rolling like loops
I see you always even in my snooze
Your smile is similar to tulip blooms
I see two swans, through your two boobs

My thoughts of you all end with a sigh
I see my child at the depth of your eye
Don't you see or am I not a guy
I know love is a thing, -- that can't buy

I am so certain that I will win
I can blow up things that can intervene
I will be happy cause I have my queen
I will be with you like a true king

LOL! The first stanza is so funny! Well, you can work on it. You didn't start off rhyming then you did then you didn't, you must make up your mind, are you going to rhyme or not.

If poetry is something that you enjoy doing and helps relieve stress, make it a hobby.

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