My new poem...do you like it? Opinions and critiques welcome.?

Question:" Heart's Garden"

I am searching for a little place
Whose garden wall curves round me like an arm
To guard my eye in mossy stone embrace
And drink the sun to keep my body warm.
Within, a monkey-puzzle tree collects the stars-
An arm with fingers curious and intricate.
Through her diamond rings my vision wanders far
And high enough for wings to evolve, delicate
And equipoised in that blue mystery
From which the garden wall is guarding me.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: " Heart's Garden"

I am searching for a little place
Whose garden wall curves round me like an arm
To guard my eye in mossy stone embrace
And drink the sun to keep my body warm.
Within, a monkey-puzzle tree collects the stars-
An arm with fingers curious and intricate.
Through her diamond rings my vision wanders far
And high enough for wings to evolve, delicate
And equipoised in that blue mystery
From which the garden wall is guarding me.

within a womb
security____

upon the wings
of the eagle,
a heart will sail
beneath the heavens ,
above the clouds.

I like it

That is a really good piece of writing keep it up you could become a poet you know.

Vivid descriptions and it flowed really nicely.

monkey-puzzle tree? The phrase causes me to tilt my head with curiosity. What, pray tell is a monkey-puzzle tree?

That curious question posed, I have to say, that is a lovely verse, and I think the little place you seek exists, upon your page, with grace.

The garden. The garden wall. To enclose.
Your vision must go high, and far enough, to let yourself break free...of the walls in which is your comfort zone....for now.

To evolve and fly! Into the mystery! That is a course taken by few....do it.

See what this magnificent poem did? Made me feel along with you...and, that is a rare thing for me to do....Great poem...It made me think of "The Secret Garden"....and that was almost the same as this poem....the breaking free!

I loved it.

i'm drunk... i have the hiccups...

and the poem was killer!

I absolutely love it. I can see you in the garden with all the flowers and trees on a sunny day. It brings a very lovely vision to mind. Thank you.

Hi Amy!

I really love this poem and all of your poems. The way you use wording and images is so unique, but very mystical. This part really stands out to me:

"Within, a monkey-puzzle tree collects the stars-
An arm with fingers curious and intricate."

I just imagine a tree at night with its arms stretched out to embrace the starry skies. I really like going in my backyard at night and staring at the moon and stars, so that is why it stands out to me I think.

There is an interesting irony here in the poem, on one hand you are capturing the feel of being enclosed in the garden and yet also the need to expand and break free. I like the contrast.

Thanks for sharing.