It's your turn - judge me?

Question:i have bashed your poems enough, now take your revenge on a poem i wrote sophomore year....its your chance to show me how terrible i am at writing poetry....

have fun!
Its about a little girl with a crush on an older guy

A Sonnet (in TRUE iambic pentameter)

I know not he who has acquired my heart
His name to me is still a mystery
But this i know - our years are far apart
and for this truth our love could never be
But why must social walls get in the way?
Is what's "acceptable" of precedence?
We simply will ignore what people say -
prepared to manage any consequence
But does he even know that i am here?
Has he concern for such a youth as I?
At last i will disclose my greatest fear,
That his love not to mine does so comply
For now I only have to be content
With such a youthful love that goes unspent.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: i have bashed your poems enough, now take your revenge on a poem i wrote sophomore year....its your chance to show me how terrible i am at writing poetry....

have fun!
Its about a little girl with a crush on an older guy

A Sonnet (in TRUE iambic pentameter)

I know not he who has acquired my heart
His name to me is still a mystery
But this i know - our years are far apart
and for this truth our love could never be
But why must social walls get in the way?
Is what's "acceptable" of precedence?
We simply will ignore what people say -
prepared to manage any consequence
But does he even know that i am here?
Has he concern for such a youth as I?
At last i will disclose my greatest fear,
That his love not to mine does so comply
For now I only have to be content
With such a youthful love that goes unspent.

ehh...i've heard better

The meaning is too obvious, use imagery.

I likes this really a lot it was nice but really sad as i have had the same thing happen long ago' and i remember the pain like it was yesterday...nice.

Well, I like your poem. You forgot to capitalize some I's in there but I know you can go back and correct that. It's sad.