Which Poem is better I wrote them both?

Question:Poem A
Death looked me in the eye once
He asked me "what makes you different from the rest in the world"
At first I didn't know how to answer
He asked again "what makes you different from the rest"
I opened my mouth to speak
But he raised his hand for silence and he had it
"What makes you different from the rest is that you are happy to see me"
Death looked me in the eye once and I grinned

Poem B
In the tombstone of my mind I found him
He was everything I didn't want to be
Anything and everything I despised drenched him
Though I almost hated him; he was still a part of me
I looked across the space to see my face
My charachter flaws

Well I wrote both of these poem and am wondering which one people think is better so what do you think?

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Poem A
Death looked me in the eye once
He asked me "what makes you different from the rest in the world"
At first I didn't know how to answer
He asked again "what makes you different from the rest"
I opened my mouth to speak
But he raised his hand for silence and he had it
"What makes you different from the rest is that you are happy to see me"
Death looked me in the eye once and I grinned

Poem B
In the tombstone of my mind I found him
He was everything I didn't want to be
Anything and everything I despised drenched him
Though I almost hated him; he was still a part of me
I looked across the space to see my face
My charachter flaws

Well I wrote both of these poem and am wondering which one people think is better so what do you think?

sorry in advance I'm an extremely blunt person.

Poem 1 is incredibly interesting and deep, maybe even more than you realize. The problem is that it is poorly written. I interpreted the theme as being someone with a large ego trying to plea with death to not take her. She was however unsuccessful in finding any reason why death shouldn't take her before the next person. Proving that we are not all as different as we think and we are not necessarily better than those we look down upon. In the last two lines the poem becomes self contradictory and the main character becomes suicidal. This poem has a lot of potential and is very good but im a critic and i think it needs to be developed further. Poem two is polar opposite well written but uninteresting to me.

keep up the good work.
Trevor

Poem B.....well both of them r not at all rhyming but still i liked the second one.....

i like A the most. it shows and interesting thought.

the first ones really cool. i like the repitition of the "death looked at me in the eye" bit. made the poem sound kinda catchy.

the second one's ok too. but the second last doesn't call out to me. like how it has 2 rhyming words in a single line (space and face). the first line is cool though

overall, i like the first one better

If prefer poem A, but recommend you edit here:

"At first I didn't know how to answer
I opened my mouth to speak
He raised his hand for silence, and had it.

'What makes you different from the rest is that you are happy to see --'

Death looked to me, and I grinned"

The rest feels a bit redundant and predictable. I never want to change a poet's vision or pretend to be a great poet! This is a good poem! Great luck with it!