Would very much like a readers opinion. Would you be so kind?

Question:Another page done
A new one is set
The chapter begins
With a game of a bet.
Love and smile. Cry now
Cry later do you know how?

Stare at a dream
Write what is seen
Stop and pretend
Write with no end.
Its time to make a move
For something so real
Dance without music
Feel its sense how it grooves.

Count up the years
And roll with the wheels
Make an appeal and live
Life and feel.
Each breath that you take
Tells a purpose, one that won’t brake
Keep up your pace
Slow down never
Life won’t pace for you ever.

Steady hands and feet never fail
Take the end of journey with an endless trail
High and low are the mountains you go
High and low are the you’ll take them you know
Don’t wonder and what’s fair its not you need.
Life is a plate one you can’t feed
Hungry for more and hungry for less
I know what I need
Do you see what I see?

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Another page done
A new one is set
The chapter begins
With a game of a bet.
Love and smile. Cry now
Cry later do you know how?

Stare at a dream
Write what is seen
Stop and pretend
Write with no end.
Its time to make a move
For something so real
Dance without music
Feel its sense how it grooves.

Count up the years
And roll with the wheels
Make an appeal and live
Life and feel.
Each breath that you take
Tells a purpose, one that won’t brake
Keep up your pace
Slow down never
Life won’t pace for you ever.

Steady hands and feet never fail
Take the end of journey with an endless trail
High and low are the mountains you go
High and low are the you’ll take them you know
Don’t wonder and what’s fair its not you need.
Life is a plate one you can’t feed
Hungry for more and hungry for less
I know what I need
Do you see what I see?

Oh my god, honestly that was a terrific poem. I loved everything about it. It really spoke to me! Great job! You are truly talented!

My rating: 1-10 = 15!!!!!

On a scale from 1 to 10.... I would say 8 1/2 stars!!!!

i dont see what you see........not a good poem sorry

Well, it's interesting. Some lines rhyme and some don't. It's not flowing real well. You've got some good ideas going. Work with it some more. It should be a good poem once you've polished it up some.

thats it
i'm off to bed
insomnia's not worth this!
I mean
I dread
one more letter, one more poem
about nature's beauty
or being left alone
Good God People
where's your spine
your spit and your blood
the guts you left behind?
smoothered in mud

Its 3 in the morn
and i can't sleep
but the droll and the dreary
and the oh so deep
bringing me closer and closer
to sleep
so while i say 'goodnight"
and welcome rest
may your minds and pens
be set free

try writing a poem without mentioning a tree
or thee
or love or heart
perhaps throw a 'fart' in just for a start

anything but the beigness
goodnight

i like it

Not really good.. it's too long for readers like us to read.
try making it short and sweet it would be better..

Keep it up..

To many unfinished sentences...

It needs a little more work...in some areas...and less in others...keep trying you're doing fine...