Is my poem a good one?

Question:By popular demand (like 3 people!!) I wrote a poem that doesn't rhyme. Here goes.

Rhythmic Rain

The patter of rain beat on the hallow dock.
Dispersing, the dinky drops hit the planks.
The rhythmic rain envelopes my well being,
As the patter of the rain falls by the ranks.

The rain lands with the soft touch of nature.
So quickly the drops find refuge in the oak wood.
I walk out onto the thin timbers.
The rain lands with a light beat onto my hood.

I whisper under my breath to nature.
The rain then will cease to exist.

Any and all comments are appreciated

~sig~
7 days without soccer makes one weak

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: By popular demand (like 3 people!!) I wrote a poem that doesn't rhyme. Here goes.

Rhythmic Rain

The patter of rain beat on the hallow dock.
Dispersing, the dinky drops hit the planks.
The rhythmic rain envelopes my well being,
As the patter of the rain falls by the ranks.

The rain lands with the soft touch of nature.
So quickly the drops find refuge in the oak wood.
I walk out onto the thin timbers.
The rain lands with a light beat onto my hood.

I whisper under my breath to nature.
The rain then will cease to exist.

Any and all comments are appreciated

~sig~
7 days without soccer makes one weak

That is truly beautiful and observant. I too love the rain. What you can improve upon though, is finding another word for rain. It's good to use the words more than once, but try not to use them so close together, okay. Beautiful
~*WinglessAngel*~

Cute! I like that about rain, ~sighs~ I see it a lot

It's great, but you know that there is always room for improvement.

wow very good! ....ur poem DOES rhyme. haha, anyway it was great

I just have a problem with "dinky" .I think you could find a better word. Other then that I think its great.