Can someone please help me with my poem?? it's sorta a emergency!!?

Question:okay soo i need to write a symbloic love peom that is 20 lines and has atleast 5 symbols representing love-1 similie,1 metaphor,1 personification and a rhyming scheme. the symbols i came up with are...red roses...promise ring....friendship knot...doved...and intertwine vines
i have the first 16 lines of the poem but need four more here is the poem so far:

It started off as a friendship knot
I knew that i would like you a lot
the first time i layed eyes on you
My heart skipped a beat or two

A feeling so true, so pure as a dove
This feeling is what some call love
Something that cannot be expressed in a simple prose
But is seen in the tracing lines of a red rose

We are sitting hear under this_________( i need a word hear) moon
Can you hear my heart play its musical tune
As you propose to me this promise ring
the quite night starts yo sing...

kinda corny....but yeahh can u also point out the simlie, metaphor and personification...thank youu!!

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: okay soo i need to write a symbloic love peom that is 20 lines and has atleast 5 symbols representing love-1 similie,1 metaphor,1 personification and a rhyming scheme. the symbols i came up with are...red roses...promise ring....friendship knot...doved...and intertwine vines
i have the first 16 lines of the poem but need four more here is the poem so far:

It started off as a friendship knot
I knew that i would like you a lot
the first time i layed eyes on you
My heart skipped a beat or two

A feeling so true, so pure as a dove
This feeling is what some call love
Something that cannot be expressed in a simple prose
But is seen in the tracing lines of a red rose

We are sitting hear under this_________( i need a word hear) moon
Can you hear my heart play its musical tune
As you propose to me this promise ring
the quite night starts yo sing...

kinda corny....but yeahh can u also point out the simlie, metaphor and personification...thank youu!!

You should make the changes you want -- make it yours.
When you use punctuation within a poem, then you need to be consistent througout the work. Always spell check your work -- even run the spell checker on mail -- the more professional you are, the better your work will be.

The Ring
by your name

The first time I glanced at you --
my heart skipped a beat or two;
vines intertwined as a friendship knot.
I knew that my life would change a lot,

A sense of power like true love doves;
is this the feeling that some call love?
I cannot express it in simple prose;
it's tracing the petals of a single red rose.

We are sitting here under this crescent moon;
can you hear my heart play a melodious tune?
I give a Promise Ring, my love so strong;
breathless until the night bursts into song.

A bird in flight, I take to the sky,
tasting the honey in your tender sigh.
This mystery, our hearts intwined,
engraved forever deep in my mind.

Smiling, laughing two doves cavort;
we are those doves as we court.
The ring saying you are mine now,
symbol of my unyielding vow.
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Best of luck. Send me your finished version.

beaming
brilliant
crescent
approving
Be sure to check that the words you already have are correct.

a. lovely moon
b. big moon
c. staring moon
d. exciting moon

well am out ta words
but i really like your poem makes me wannta write one

p.s it's not corny)))

Harvest moon

Looks good. You got the rhyme scheme and picked your symbols.

Moons Wax and Wane so those might be good words.

I got a metaphor in there with the dove, but then you need an extra symbol.

It's a quiet night not quite night.

I think you need a personification and a simile. Dictionary.com will define these terms if they aren't clear.

magical

I don't want to re-write this kk? So, all I did was edit <3

I loved it so far and truly can't wait till you post the finished product *^_^*