I wrote this. Does it make any sense to you?

Question:Fast the fall lights glimmer
on trees of red and gold
when autumn eves are fading,
the colors no longer hold
their dancing bodies shimmer
and fair they lay 'aground
till all the green's masquerading
in tuffs of grey and brown.

Not leaves but eves as in evening. I wanted to put somthing different. I've been reading Emily again so this is not modern day speech. It's a short poem about the shortening days of autumn and how the colors die to colors of grey and brown in the end.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Fast the fall lights glimmer
on trees of red and gold
when autumn eves are fading,
the colors no longer hold
their dancing bodies shimmer
and fair they lay 'aground
till all the green's masquerading
in tuffs of grey and brown.

Not leaves but eves as in evening. I wanted to put somthing different. I've been reading Emily again so this is not modern day speech. It's a short poem about the shortening days of autumn and how the colors die to colors of grey and brown in the end.

two minor comments: till should be 'til, and I think to keep the rhythm of the poem--which is exceptional and paramount to the poem working--you may want to apostrophe away a syllable in the word masquerading--when I read it I pronounced the word masq'rading and it flowed better.

I liked it quite a bit, but have always had a soft spot for poems about fall.... Loved those closing lines, "in tufts of grey and brown" fabulous!

Your rhymes sound fantastic and you draw a vivid picture of something creative in your mind. I am a writer by profession and I can attest that your use of words fit clearly to what you want to say.

It reminds me of the style that Henry David Thoreau used.
sort of.

it's all about your personal imagination and what creative outlet you choose and this poem does make since to me and it rings true also

i think this poem is beautifull and i completely understand it but i think poems come withen and its really if you like it or not its your own oppinion!
but anyways i really enjoyed reading it!
gd luck with ur poetry book(:

all sounds good but does this sound better at the start ... how fast thy light falls

its great

Pictorial and vivid images flow beautifully in this lovely poem. Your rhyming is perfectly done which gives it a classic touch that I love. The lines are carefully created and their meaning is clear, too many to list my favorites- I love the entire poem, but let me just say the ending is superb. Thank you.

I like it. You should write one about winter turning into spring since tomorrow is the first day of spring.

Wow! That was great! I love autumn, it is my favorite season! You made it so clear to visualize! I loved it! I think that I will write a poem about fall and autumn too! thanks for the inspiration!