Critique my haiku please?

Question:Drunken Oblivion,
Opens her legs invitingly,
And Once more i`m phukked.

Please don`t be cruel....i have a mental age of 8.
Thank you.
Thank you so much.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Drunken Oblivion,
Opens her legs invitingly,
And Once more i`m phukked.

Please don`t be cruel....i have a mental age of 8.
Thank you.
Thank you so much.

Sorry,
but I'm not being cruel.
This is both distubing and gross.
Thank you.

Not as good as your Goth Poem.

that's disgusting.

I'm not saying it's bad.
just... graphic.

If you have a mental age of 8,how are you wise enough to say you are so we "won't be cruel"?

Anyways, since it's "topic" isn't what a haiku generally speaks of and has innuendos of being vulgar...I don't like it.

your only 8 years old?

I'd say you're about 15 so your IQ must be pretty low if your mental age is 8, so it's pretty good for your low IQ.
Also, you have too many syllables anyhow, so it can't be a Haiku.

Not disgusting or cruel but the fact that you didn't say "****" means you shouldn't use the word.

I doubt you're eight though.

Not a haiku. It is a poem. It's not going to make my top 10 list. It just seems to be in poor taste.