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Question:its not original. I was listening to Broken by Lifehouse. This song made me cry like no song has ever made me cry before. so i wrote this while listening to it
“Holding On” inspired by Lifehouse

There is a song that makes my heart dance slowly.
It brings tears to my eyes, and warmth reactions that chill my spine
The song is slow and mellow the words are touching and fine.
Im falling apart and barley breathing, with a broken heart that’s still beating
In the pain, there is healing.
In your name, I find meaning.
So im holding on
Barley holding on to you.
Eyes wide shut I see nothing
Only dreams I wish and wonder.
Each word is said poetically that teals my heart away.
I reflect upon its comfort and the power of its love.
The emotions are there knocking at my heart.
Let me in and ill guide you through the parts.
The smile and the tears that every word recalls your past.
Don’t fade away let your soul take ever wonder
And please don’t break apart.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: its not original. I was listening to Broken by Lifehouse. This song made me cry like no song has ever made me cry before. so i wrote this while listening to it
“Holding On” inspired by Lifehouse

There is a song that makes my heart dance slowly.
It brings tears to my eyes, and warmth reactions that chill my spine
The song is slow and mellow the words are touching and fine.
Im falling apart and barley breathing, with a broken heart that’s still beating
In the pain, there is healing.
In your name, I find meaning.
So im holding on
Barley holding on to you.
Eyes wide shut I see nothing
Only dreams I wish and wonder.
Each word is said poetically that teals my heart away.
I reflect upon its comfort and the power of its love.
The emotions are there knocking at my heart.
Let me in and ill guide you through the parts.
The smile and the tears that every word recalls your past.
Don’t fade away let your soul take ever wonder
And please don’t break apart.

I wants to teal yur heart away while yur eyes are wide shut...
Hey you wrote it first!
Your a wierd little pinguin, but ya gots more points than me so power to ya kid!

it's a long one

(i just got sick up in my mouth) hope your proud of yourself

Your right it's not original, but it's yours and that's what matters.
Nice work:)

Too emotional but great one.

Isn't it wonderful that when we read something like you've just written that it stands so clearly, like a beacon in our midst, to call us now to wonder what splendor you've inspired in those of us who slept, not knowing what we've missed...thank you...