How do you like my little poem? Feel free to comment !!?

Question:Our love was like a candle light
As one, the single flame grew strong
But like most candles' plight
It did not burn for long !!

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Our love was like a candle light
As one, the single flame grew strong
But like most candles' plight
It did not burn for long !!

I think you and I could get an eternal flame going baby...

its a good start, try to add more

its really good i do think it needs a little more if you want to give it more depth
its a very cute short poem though

i love it!!! u got talent babe!

expressive, from the heart, try not to put too much !!. You've emphasised well on the theme using the candle to repesent an end. GREAT JOB!

Thats so ummmmm beautiful. Did you base it on your Ex-boyfriend? Its really meaningful. Its like a song to my ears, a painting to my eyes. It really speaks to me. Keep on poeting!( based on the phrase: Keep on trucking!)

it really great, so true
u should write another one

It sounds good, you could easily change it into a song.

You have wonderful ideas going now add to them and I think you'll have an excellent poem. It sounds like you need to add some more to it.