I need opinions please!?

Question:I have been writing for several years now. I have published several poems through a company and have the opportunity to publish again, but lately others have been encouraging me to try and get my stuff published in other places, hopefully somewhere that will pay me...and I have been feeling for a while now that I am ready to move on to bigger and better things when it comes to my writing. So anyway I am going to put the latest poem that I have the chance to publish with the old company and I want people’s honest opinions on it, this i will really help me to decide whether I will just go with my same old company or if I will try to submit elsewhere, so anyway thanks in advance for everyones help!

Rain

Raining down on top of me

Magic toads

With flimsy wings

Blonde hair

Blue eyes

No one seems to recognize

The patterns of life

Deep inside

So unsure

Yet hard as stone

No freedom left in the land of the free

No bravery

Only cowards that hide

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I have been writing for several years now. I have published several poems through a company and have the opportunity to publish again, but lately others have been encouraging me to try and get my stuff published in other places, hopefully somewhere that will pay me...and I have been feeling for a while now that I am ready to move on to bigger and better things when it comes to my writing. So anyway I am going to put the latest poem that I have the chance to publish with the old company and I want people’s honest opinions on it, this i will really help me to decide whether I will just go with my same old company or if I will try to submit elsewhere, so anyway thanks in advance for everyones help!

Rain

Raining down on top of me

Magic toads

With flimsy wings

Blonde hair

Blue eyes

No one seems to recognize

The patterns of life

Deep inside

So unsure

Yet hard as stone

No freedom left in the land of the free

No bravery

Only cowards that hide

That is really really good.
i love the way you use repetition and also the patterns of life part.
they would have to be stupid not to accept it and pay you loads for it!
Good luck! (but i dont think you need it!)

Wow...
I loved it!
It was so deep

so all you write is poems? its definalty a intense poem i liked it BUT honestly i dont know if people are into buying a book of poems? i know i dont and i read A LOT .. but dude that was a good poem..

it pretty good what do you think of mine?

How many more times
Of you making me cry
Is it going to take
To make me realize

You don't love me anymore
You won't love me anymore
And you won't think about me anymore

I walked down the hall yesterday
And seen you with her
You had smile on your face
That made my heart burn

You don't love me anymore
You won't hold me anymore
And you won't think about me anymore

You called me last night
And said "Babe I want you back."
But I didn't have the strength
To turn and laugh

You don't love me anymore
You won't love me anymore
And you won't think about me anymore

You broke my heart again today
Just bu looking in my eyes
And even though it hurt
It made me realize

I don't love me anymore
I won't hold you anymore
And I'll never think about ...anymore

I don't love me anymore
I won't hold you anymore
And I'll never think about ...anymore.

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nice poem....
Well, if it's big and better things you want, I say move on. You'll never know how far you can get if you don't take any risks.

good job =D

i believe its a very good poem it shows some emotion but not to much emotion bravo!

c-o-o-l cool i loved it i like writing my self i wonder if any one would feel the same about my work im writing a story now i haven't got so far yet

Wonderful...Incidentally it is a rainy day here. The poem is too good. Keep up the good work. Good luck with your novels.

No freedom... no bravery... only cowards behind truth and lies... toads with wings... rose colored glasses/black glasses...

Yeah, I don't get it. Are people only brave and free when they go past truth, lies, romanticizing the past/present, being cynical about the present/future, and thinking magical thoughts and seeing how profoundly ... deep? ... it is that it's just raining? Is that what you're saying?

Seeing as how I view magical thinking and denial of logical scientific truth as endangering our nation and our world I can't help but disagree with that particular concept. Yes, it rains, and yes, that's cool, but saying that people aren't brave for not recognizing how deep that is is kinda ... yeah.

If this isn't the message that you're trying to get across, then may I suggest rewriting it a smidge?

Of course, if it is the point you were trying to get it across, then hey, it works then, doesn't it. =) Don't let me disagreeing with the message hold you back... I'm just another @** with an opnion. =)

Saul