Is this anygood?

Question:Words once said are now Unspoken,
trapped within for I'm now broken.
Tears now shed you gave no warning,
so trapped am i forever in mourning.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Words once said are now Unspoken,
trapped within for I'm now broken.
Tears now shed you gave no warning,
so trapped am i forever in mourning.

Loses it on the last line too many syllables or something---its not mine ----so it'll have to be you to refine it...
Speak it over and over so you'll feel how the rhythm works and if there are "wrong" bits...hone them (you got a Poe thing going from the start...Keep it up...)

Yeah, work with it a little. It's worth keeping. You have a good idea.