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Question:A tribute to my hero, Ronaldinho

Once this guy takes the field,
The fate of the game has been sealed.
Every goalie fears this one foe,
The balls' master, Ronaldinho.

Opponents, from which he lures
Using his moves, which are just like blurs.
His eyes bring uncanny vision,
From which he makes a perfect decision.

He bends the ball unlike a stall
Right around the English wall.
He runs, creating a foggy haze
The field seems a perpetual maze.

Blessed as he is, he takes the lead
Just like a brilliant, beastly white steed.
Your hero will be proud of what he's become,
My hero will tell the world that he's not done.

Winning the crowd over, he shakes the stadium.
Because no one can shut down, the great Brazilian.
The one thing my hero doesn’t hide.
Is the expression of being unsatisfied.

if you're smart, you'll get the last two lines.

~sig~
7 days without soccer makes one weak.


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: A tribute to my hero, Ronaldinho

Once this guy takes the field,
The fate of the game has been sealed.
Every goalie fears this one foe,
The balls' master, Ronaldinho.

Opponents, from which he lures
Using his moves, which are just like blurs.
His eyes bring uncanny vision,
From which he makes a perfect decision.

He bends the ball unlike a stall
Right around the English wall.
He runs, creating a foggy haze
The field seems a perpetual maze.

Blessed as he is, he takes the lead
Just like a brilliant, beastly white steed.
Your hero will be proud of what he's become,
My hero will tell the world that he's not done.

Winning the crowd over, he shakes the stadium.
Because no one can shut down, the great Brazilian.
The one thing my hero doesn’t hide.
Is the expression of being unsatisfied.

if you're smart, you'll get the last two lines.

~sig~
7 days without soccer makes one weak.

Nice work:)