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Question:When walking on grass what does it do
might just be muddy and stick to your shoe

notion is funny when talking of grass
but have you given thought to the last time you passed

you'd feel pain if someone stepped on you
how do you know grass don't feel it too

because we're human we don't stop to think
this lack of compassion is our weakest link

with just one footstep could be a whole family of grass
you took them out and spit as you passed

their friends are mourning; that's why they turned brown
then they die too; filter back in the ground

So next time you decide to Drink and Drive
think of the thoughtless footstep that took so many grass lives

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: When walking on grass what does it do
might just be muddy and stick to your shoe

notion is funny when talking of grass
but have you given thought to the last time you passed

you'd feel pain if someone stepped on you
how do you know grass don't feel it too

because we're human we don't stop to think
this lack of compassion is our weakest link

with just one footstep could be a whole family of grass
you took them out and spit as you passed

their friends are mourning; that's why they turned brown
then they die too; filter back in the ground

So next time you decide to Drink and Drive
think of the thoughtless footstep that took so many grass lives

Beautiful. I personally think, that I have never read a bad piece of poetry in my life. (Unless its just plain stupid.) Anyone who seems to think that its unclear or confusing, is right because that's what poetry is. It comes from your heart, not the mind, and in my opinion, it doesn't always have to make sense.

i dont understand how WALKING and drunk driving relate here.....everyone has to walk on grass, unless you build a sidewalk, which i'm pretty sure kills just as much grass as walking on it.....

a drunk driving .... please explain

i like it but it needs some work. The drunk driving doesnt fit in

Well, I see the connection, but I'm not sure that it works out quite how you intend...

I end up feeling more sorry for the grass than the victims of drunk driving (and I don't usually feel sorry for plants). The focus never really shifts quite as well as it seems like it should.

That said, I think it's still really good. If you could find some way to move the focus from the grass to the victims of drunk driving without diminishing it, this would be really good. (IMHO, it's still good as it is, but not quite what it could be.)
Maybe one more stanza, perhaps divide the last two lines into two stanzas that both deal with the comparison?

Good job!

It sound kind of hick to me. To be honest with you I never got all the way through it before getting bored. Damn now I feel like Simon Cowell......................great!!

Other than the fact that I'd like to see you work on the last line, it's fabulous.

I think the last line should remove the word "grass" entirely.
You could replace it with "unsuspecting" or "innocent" lives.

But overall I really, really like it. Great imagery, and it makes you think.

I like how you shifted the point of view. At first the poem seemed strange, I thought that you felt pity for grass, but after reading the last sentence I realized that it is how people feel while drinking and driving. I get it and I really like how the poem makes you feel.

That's the bitter fact of life. We walk over others to pave way for ourseleves, are not we ????????????????????? As for most important part of ur poem, u should send it for publication in 'Times of India, Daily News Paper' as children of rich drink and drive and kill people who are sleeping on the pavements..It happens here everyday.

Sorry, but this does not do it for me. Using grass as a metaphor for people then evolving into drinking and driving stretches believability. You have three distinct ideas going: lack of compassion, thoughtless actions and driving drunk. Each deserves to be it's own poem.