Please critique my poem WORDS AND MUSIC?

Question:Light streams from the eternal source
Changing into different entities
The waves lengthened and shortened breaking into further complicated substances.
Rays burst through the atmosphere, making marbling shapes in oil.
Colours jet through, resting and penetrating rocks and water.
Heat radiates from the glowing orb creating movement and wind.
Jangling sounds rip through the air.
Purple colours create an aura and the softly scented air separates and pours itself into the clouds. Everything is moving, dancing, wobbling and glug glug glugging, rasping and trickling.
Sounds vibrate the air but there is nothing alive to breathe and words had not been born.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Light streams from the eternal source
Changing into different entities
The waves lengthened and shortened breaking into further complicated substances.
Rays burst through the atmosphere, making marbling shapes in oil.
Colours jet through, resting and penetrating rocks and water.
Heat radiates from the glowing orb creating movement and wind.
Jangling sounds rip through the air.
Purple colours create an aura and the softly scented air separates and pours itself into the clouds. Everything is moving, dancing, wobbling and glug glug glugging, rasping and trickling.
Sounds vibrate the air but there is nothing alive to breathe and words had not been born.

Very creative. When I read each line I try to imagine what you are expressing! To me that is what poetry is all about allowing you to express yourself and the reader to experience it through their imagination! Good job!~

good job

it sounds really good.

Very interesting. I see the birth of the world.