Do you think this is a good poem.......?

Question:i thought you said is the name of it

i thought you said you'd fix my heart,
i thought you said you loved me,
i thought you said you'd be there with me till the end and never want to leave,
i thought you said i'd always win....now it's been 3 months since you broke my heart again...and now your back and expect me to let you back in,
well i got news for you sweetie it's not gonna happen,
but...before you go i want to ask you just one question,
i thought you said you loved me....what happen to the man i loved?

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: i thought you said is the name of it

i thought you said you'd fix my heart,
i thought you said you loved me,
i thought you said you'd be there with me till the end and never want to leave,
i thought you said i'd always win....now it's been 3 months since you broke my heart again...and now your back and expect me to let you back in,
well i got news for you sweetie it's not gonna happen,
but...before you go i want to ask you just one question,
i thought you said you loved me....what happen to the man i loved?

Good start. Needs a little more depth.
Don't give up writing. You have potential. Get in touch with how you feel, increase your vocabulary & write from your heart.

Since you asked,
I think you might get a C&W tune out of it but it's not a great poem.
Best line-"I thought you said you'd fix my heart"
Worst line-"well I got news for you sweetie..."
Keep on pluggin'

Good try. Keep it up. Give variation in your subject. Good luck.

It needs a little more substance.....mind you the message is clear. Needs a small shake-up on the wording though.

i think its alright. go into a few more details..but its kinda cutsie