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Question:She falls in love with the sky sometimes and when just talking she tries to rhyme. The cloud cover makes it impossible to see the beauty, but in itself is a vision in its frailty when you compare it to the vastness of everything else.

Drawn to the charts that will forever hang up on the walls of a building inside a scream. No one can say. Well, can’t you dream? Only one look at a subdivision of files to know that you could. You just have to have the right part...lock into a skylit scene...an obsessive scheme.

And so you walk to find the small town where the streets are filled with glass. There is never any blood or flat tires, irony at its finest hour. Tiny and fighting, liquid desires. Blowing smoke in your face to show their disrespect. Running away only to get pulled right back...

There stands a chance.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: She falls in love with the sky sometimes and when just talking she tries to rhyme. The cloud cover makes it impossible to see the beauty, but in itself is a vision in its frailty when you compare it to the vastness of everything else.

Drawn to the charts that will forever hang up on the walls of a building inside a scream. No one can say. Well, can’t you dream? Only one look at a subdivision of files to know that you could. You just have to have the right part...lock into a skylit scene...an obsessive scheme.

And so you walk to find the small town where the streets are filled with glass. There is never any blood or flat tires, irony at its finest hour. Tiny and fighting, liquid desires. Blowing smoke in your face to show their disrespect. Running away only to get pulled right back...

There stands a chance.

this is the best line

And so you walk to find the small town where the streets are filled with glass. There is never any blood or flat tires, irony at its finest hour.

the rest is drawn too tightly into a narrative, storytelling scheme of phrases, so the images are a blur...

when the cloud cover is taken off....

..she will shine in all her beauty

by the blaze of which

....whole world will go blind !