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Position:Home>Poetry> Which poem do you like better 10 pts.?Question:He always wondered why. He forced himself to never cry. but sometimes he wanted to die. she never cared. His mother left him. The light in his heart going dim. He wanted so badly her love. she never cared. The bruises on his heart. always make him fall apart. The boy is badly broken. She never cared. He is gone now. You could ask how. But you already know She never cared. --------------------------------------... People always say hold on and you'll be ok. We all know that ain't true. The world isn't new. It's always hard. why we put up a guard. People downtown dealin people cheatin, people stealin. the world ain't right. got to reach new heights. then we'll finally show maybe people ain't so low. maybe we all good at heart. we all do our part. we got to learn to love. so we can be w/ the father above. --------------------------------------... Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: He always wondered why. He forced himself to never cry. but sometimes he wanted to die. she never cared. His mother left him. The light in his heart going dim. He wanted so badly her love. she never cared. The bruises on his heart. always make him fall apart. The boy is badly broken. She never cared. He is gone now. You could ask how. But you already know She never cared. --------------------------------------... People always say hold on and you'll be ok. We all know that ain't true. The world isn't new. It's always hard. why we put up a guard. People downtown dealin people cheatin, people stealin. the world ain't right. got to reach new heights. then we'll finally show maybe people ain't so low. maybe we all good at heart. we all do our part. we got to learn to love. so we can be w/ the father above. --------------------------------------... I really think the second poem is the best. It isvery true the message thats your trying to send to people by your second poem. I actually really like it. The second one, prolly. But your rhyme scheme is a bit basic.... try a bit more variation to make it interesting. Otherwise it makes the poem seem almost lifeless. The second one had a better flow to it. |