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Question:Purple passions

Purple passsions, crimson sin,
yellow daisies are witnessing
their fall from grace

Ribbons of pink that float in the air
beneath blue skies so soft and fair,
time stands still in youthful lust
a touch, a caress, all lost in the dust
of time and space

Yet in this place
there is a sweet embrace
remembered still, of
two lovers on a hill,
reflected in her smile.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Purple passions

Purple passsions, crimson sin,
yellow daisies are witnessing
their fall from grace

Ribbons of pink that float in the air
beneath blue skies so soft and fair,
time stands still in youthful lust
a touch, a caress, all lost in the dust
of time and space

Yet in this place
there is a sweet embrace
remembered still, of
two lovers on a hill,
reflected in her smile.

The smile of rememberance, perhaps Mona Lisa? Well said, an excellent flow and words well placed. The only thing I could suggest would be to eliminate two "the's". The first is in the first line of the second stanza before air. The second is in the fourth line of the same stanza before dust. Perhaps it was me as I read it but it seemed to read better without them. Overall, a very nice poem. Not all need to be esoteric and symbolic to impress. This impresses.

I like the rhyme and the rhythm.

Perfect. Nothing here to criticize.

youthful lust and sweet embrace are a little hackneyed. other than that it was decent.

" a rose is there to smell, to feel the softness in it, to look at its beautiful color with admiring eyes, no need to say anything...just enjoy its God-given beauty...

... I was telling about your poem, not the flower..!