Here's a poem, kind of nasty I guess--whatcha think YA folks?

Question:Vain

Wickedly
I am a flower in a field
Being moved by the breeze
Dancing ‘fore the eyes of God

A child comes
Innocent and alive
Eyes like dynamos, path like lightning
Searching for his mate for the day

Electrically alive
Pleading, hoping, yearning and
Yes!
He plucks me
And satisfaction is mine
For I am one heart’s desire
I, ‘fore all others, am chosen
Am wanted
Am taken

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Vain

Wickedly
I am a flower in a field
Being moved by the breeze
Dancing ‘fore the eyes of God

A child comes
Innocent and alive
Eyes like dynamos, path like lightning
Searching for his mate for the day

Electrically alive
Pleading, hoping, yearning and
Yes!
He plucks me
And satisfaction is mine
For I am one heart’s desire
I, ‘fore all others, am chosen
Am wanted
Am taken

This has a lot of levels to it which makes one think which is great. Well done. The only line that did not seem to flow as well for me was "Searching for his mate for the day." But that could be me.

I really liked it.great words and it had me playing it in my head..i think it's a winner for sure.

I really like that your poem begins with the word "Wickedly." It seems ironic somehow. "His mate for the day" is another intriguing line. The third stanza or verse paragraph is particularly power, interesting and beautiful. I dig it. :-)

Not bad, could use more intensity imo.

When you said it was nasty I was expecting some sick stuff, kind of let down that it didn't have a little more to offer in that area.