Please tell me what you think of this poem? This poem is a published piece but I

Question:Daddy Dearest

And I prayed to God
To strike you dead
As you tiptoed to my bed
He did not and I went mad
Did I ever tell you
Daddy Dearest
You were the worst lay
I ever had

Marjorie Jablonski

Copyright ?2008 Marjorie P Jablonski

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Daddy Dearest

And I prayed to God
To strike you dead
As you tiptoed to my bed
He did not and I went mad
Did I ever tell you
Daddy Dearest
You were the worst lay
I ever had

Marjorie Jablonski

Copyright ?2008 Marjorie P Jablonski

A provocative piece with a strong ending that is perhaps too strong in that I question whether an abuser cares about his sexual reputation. Overall, well done, my compliments..

I loved it really alot.I have wished a few abusers Dead also..

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my first thought was....pain and terror. sad but nicely described

I don't know if irony really works in this poem, kind of lessens any power the work might have had, don't you think?

Not sticking to the rhyme scheme you set up in the first three lines, was an interesting choice--elongating the second phrase into an eventual rhyme--but again, I think it takes power out of the work.

Just my two cents, spend them only on gum if you wish.

Sad but a reality for many, I have a close friend this applies to. She's in her 50's now & still a victim in so many ways.