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Position:Home>Poetry> New poem :)?Question:Caring soldier You try to keep me safe behind as i see you passing by saying my feelings are blind to keep me safe so that i won't die.... Caring prince You speak of tears I won't cry I have no reason to do so then why? why are you so afraid of hurting my heart As it creates the gapp that leaves us appart... Caring knight It is today that i realise what the perfect person means a person that protects others with his own shield... what do you think? :) im open for critics and corrections :) Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Caring soldier You try to keep me safe behind as i see you passing by saying my feelings are blind to keep me safe so that i won't die.... Caring prince You speak of tears I won't cry I have no reason to do so then why? why are you so afraid of hurting my heart As it creates the gapp that leaves us appart... Caring knight It is today that i realise what the perfect person means a person that protects others with his own shield... what do you think? :) im open for critics and corrections :) well...i'm a poet. so.... poetry sometimes has a reason... like something in your life happening. if you think this is what you feel... then no one can judge it, it's your work. If you feel it, It's the best thing you can come up with. everyone has there own opinion. so if you like it, keep it and don't listen to other peoples critical ideas. dont quit your day job....seriously love poems usually only apeal to the poet and the subject. you know wat dis is absolutely coooooolllll......if i hav a kind of award i'll give u de best of de best best poem award....keep writin maybe oneday someone great like soyinka will compile dis......de sky is de beginnin. please can use dis 4 my debut sonng album.......like kinda of lyrics. I do not understand what it is you are trying to say or where you are going with this poem. All 3 figures are heroic types. The soldier leaves you behind, the prince breaks your heart and the knight protects you? If this was meant as an evolution, then to me it needs more to make it plausible. |