This poem is not so good, and my first on this subject, can you tell me where I

Question:Free for all But you

Standing still
Everywhere
To let us breathe our fill
Ask not a share
Though we break your steady standing will

For your help we take a fare
Putting your kids in our meals

In the cold you lie so bare
While giving us the warmth

To keep you warm not even fur
Yet we use you to make our berth

On you I write
With pencil so sharp
To you it bites
Yet you make music like a harp

What gift can I give that won’t be light
What a beauty, what a sight
All I can do for all these gifts, but this simple dedication.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Free for all But you

Standing still
Everywhere
To let us breathe our fill
Ask not a share
Though we break your steady standing will

For your help we take a fare
Putting your kids in our meals

In the cold you lie so bare
While giving us the warmth

To keep you warm not even fur
Yet we use you to make our berth

On you I write
With pencil so sharp
To you it bites
Yet you make music like a harp

What gift can I give that won’t be light
What a beauty, what a sight
All I can do for all these gifts, but this simple dedication.

It's good poetry, you're a good poet. I love the way you sizzle and then stone, and end with a splash, the slope is steep and slured, and the sound, sick, but the ending was superb.

its a very good poem, but a poem should not dictate what the reader should feel, poems can never be forced fed or they fall on death ears

But it is a good poem. I think you should look at the grammar more then anything else and punctuation. I like it.