I have a new poem! (coming home)?

Question:“Coming Home”
Brittany

I am praying that this time will be different than any other.
Finally I no longer see you as a stranger, but as my brother.
My head is spinning in circles; reality is too much to bear.
Being very careful on what emotions I am willing to share.

God only knows if this will happen again and my heart will break.
My whole life is in your hands now, everything is at stake.
I still cannot believe that you are really coming home now.
It seems that you have changed, although I don’t know how.

I have waited so long for this moment, and now I don’t know what to do.
So many times before I have said I was done with you.
I never meant all of those nasty things I have said.
Let’s forget about all of the horrible past, and be a family instead.

Sound like a deal?

Writers Note—Hello everyone! This poem was about my brother that has made some progress on our relationship as a family after one year. Truth be told, it was all bull crap, but nevertheless,

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: “Coming Home”
Brittany

I am praying that this time will be different than any other.
Finally I no longer see you as a stranger, but as my brother.
My head is spinning in circles; reality is too much to bear.
Being very careful on what emotions I am willing to share.

God only knows if this will happen again and my heart will break.
My whole life is in your hands now, everything is at stake.
I still cannot believe that you are really coming home now.
It seems that you have changed, although I don’t know how.

I have waited so long for this moment, and now I don’t know what to do.
So many times before I have said I was done with you.
I never meant all of those nasty things I have said.
Let’s forget about all of the horrible past, and be a family instead.

Sound like a deal?

Writers Note—Hello everyone! This poem was about my brother that has made some progress on our relationship as a family after one year. Truth be told, it was all bull crap, but nevertheless,

WOW! That was amazing... Very good... :D LOVE IT!

its ok - but i dont think it flows very well but i think it tells a good story.

i would change the first stanza to:

I am praying that this time will be different than any other.
I no longer see you as a stranger, but as my brother. (or your my brother)
My head is spinning in circles; reality is too much to bear.
I'm careful of what emotions I am willing to share.

you know not big changes or anything just minor changes that night help the poem to flow better - that wasn't the best example but i hope you get what i mean

personally i don't like poems that always rhyme but that is you decision to writie it like that so dom't change the way it rhymes but i do like the story you are telling through this poem

your poem is great!!! i love poems and i try to write some of my own but ahhh...yours is really good.

lilly has a point the flow is off

It's a beautiful story poem. For structure and I know about this because I have to rewrite alot of my poems for this, the flow is off a little bit. Other then that I wish you well.