Can yu tell me what yu think? i know it's kinda long...?

Question:TEN POINTS: the most creative answer as to what this makes yu think of or how this makes yu feel:

hurting, worrying
story of my life
i keep things to myself
so i dont let out whats inside
and maybe if i stay boxed up
my problems will fade away
tell you anything and everything
is what you always say
at times you seem to push me
to find out why i cry
i cry because i cant make it
give me time my tears will dry
your voice makes me shiver
your kisses make me weak
theres a limit for self pity
i feel ive long since reached my peak
when bitter thoughts of suicide
creep into my mind
your the only thing that keeps me here
you help me every single time
i live in a house with the devil
grandpa just couldnt keep his hands still
he touched the little girl already
no worries on how she'd feel
she tells him to stop and he just laughs
he said it feels good so hold still
and when she said she'd tell her mommy
he said she doesnt need to know and never will.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: TEN POINTS: the most creative answer as to what this makes yu think of or how this makes yu feel:

hurting, worrying
story of my life
i keep things to myself
so i dont let out whats inside
and maybe if i stay boxed up
my problems will fade away
tell you anything and everything
is what you always say
at times you seem to push me
to find out why i cry
i cry because i cant make it
give me time my tears will dry
your voice makes me shiver
your kisses make me weak
theres a limit for self pity
i feel ive long since reached my peak
when bitter thoughts of suicide
creep into my mind
your the only thing that keeps me here
you help me every single time
i live in a house with the devil
grandpa just couldnt keep his hands still
he touched the little girl already
no worries on how she'd feel
she tells him to stop and he just laughs
he said it feels good so hold still
and when she said she'd tell her mommy
he said she doesnt need to know and never will.

The subject matter is extremely painful and it is very obvious in your writing. it has the seeds of a very moving and gripping poem. I hate it when others try to "fix" my poems because I usually know exactly what I want to convey. Sometimes it is not a case of writing badly but someone listening badly. (That doesn't happen when I can read my stuff aloud.) However, having said all that ,I as a published poet, would like to give you some tips. The metre of your poem changes. It is blank verse, then rhymes then it seems to lose that flow again. Could you take the ideas you want to convey, then decide how (rhyme or not) then order of things to be said: love, abuse, shame, help and so on, and then try again? Your words show real depth and meaning. It is a message that could speak to many. I hope I have not offended you in my effort to help.

It makes me feel sad but inspired. Its so creative. It tells a story but its a poem its really beautiful I'm speechless....I'ts really good... sorry if thats not in great context.

this is beautiful if you wrote way to go
but i don't understand why would you write about that did you or some one u know went through that

Narrative and fluent in the beginning yet I think that the storyline looses it clutch and reader’s concern before it ends. My very own thought of course.
Overall, good poem.

I only read the first part not the second or third.
If someone or yourself is being sexually molested you need to stop this person. Which means you need to tell someone that you know will listen. If you don't think any of your family will then you call the police!

This person does not care about you and yes is the devil. I believe if you go to your family and no one listens or takes you series....they are just as bad as him.
You have to live with what he's put you through and you'll have to deal with this later in life. This person has messed up your head and doesn't care what crap your going to have to go through in your life. SO DO NOT CARE WHAT YOU HAVE TO DO TO THIS PERSON IN ORDER TO SAVE YOURSELF. Stand up for yourself and speak up. This is wrong and you are Right for speaking up about it.

Wow, that's really heartfelt and you're a really good poet!!
It conveys a certain sadness throughout it and I feel able to relate to it to a certain extent - I find that I keep a lot of stuff bottled up aswel and it makes me sad that I can't tell anyone as I have noone that will listen.... Great poem though!!