Read this poem plz...i dnt knw if i shud bin it or enter it in competition (unde

Question:You stand there taking it all in, trying to ignore it
Hands clenched you try your hardest to endure it
Your head starts to burn and you lose control
Then suddenly you answer back to what you’ve just been told
The anger locked inside has escaped and is free
So it chooses to enthral your soul and cause misery
The fury destroys any feeling of consideration
You soul becomes trapped with no hope of liberation
The actions you perform are unnecessary and cruel
The words your tongue utters are brutal and untrue
Not realising the hurt and pain you will soon have to see,
You continue your quest for annihilation and melancholy
Anger is hard to compress when it spirals out of control
Anger is not fastidious when it takes over your soul
Time goes by, your conscious starts to show
However moments in time cannot rewind, as we know
So u live ur life in repent,wishing you could turn back the hands of time
But regrets are made, and people are hurt, these things cannot unwind.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: You stand there taking it all in, trying to ignore it
Hands clenched you try your hardest to endure it
Your head starts to burn and you lose control
Then suddenly you answer back to what you’ve just been told
The anger locked inside has escaped and is free
So it chooses to enthral your soul and cause misery
The fury destroys any feeling of consideration
You soul becomes trapped with no hope of liberation
The actions you perform are unnecessary and cruel
The words your tongue utters are brutal and untrue
Not realising the hurt and pain you will soon have to see,
You continue your quest for annihilation and melancholy
Anger is hard to compress when it spirals out of control
Anger is not fastidious when it takes over your soul
Time goes by, your conscious starts to show
However moments in time cannot rewind, as we know
So u live ur life in repent,wishing you could turn back the hands of time
But regrets are made, and people are hurt, these things cannot unwind.

yes i love it!!! its great!! it makes a good point!!

no sorry just no

Nice now read minds
I stagger in the gathering possessed by a patter-in
That be scatterin
Over the globe will my vocals be travellin
Unravellin my abdomen it's slime that's babblin
Grammatics that are masculine
I grab them in, verbally badgerin broads
I wish that Madelline, was back on Video LP
Raps I make up like blacks do excuses
I feel like Noah, hookin my mellows up on deuces
If a broad ain't got a mind or job or crib she useless
Acoustic basslines embrace rhymes while I chase mines
They say signs of the end is near
I wonder can I walk a righteous path holdin a beer
Got more verses than a Kramer, go off like a pager
Skills uglier than Craig Mack in your ear I'm the flavor
My old bird said some of my songs sound like noise
Don't watch the Bulls as much, they
got too many white boys
A million black men walkin, towards one direction
For sure, the cream of the planets... resurrection

Good, but is that the real theme you want to express?