A poem about homophobia.?

Question:He holds her close
And he strokes her cheek
He feels her heartbeat
It makes him weak

He holds him close
And he strokes his cheek
He feels his heartbeat
It makes him weak

He whispers her name
A loving motion
He squeezes her hand
With tender devotion

He whispers his name
A loving motion
He squeezes his hand
With tender devotion

His voice is shaking
As he tells her that line
He utters "I love you"
For the very first time

His voice is shaking
As he tells him that line
He utters "I love you"
For the very first time

The relationship envied
By friends and peers
Neither has to worry
About mocking and fears

The relationship disgraced
By enemies and others
Hate to be afraid
To love one another

Both couples are loving
Both are the same
In yet one has to suffer
While one feels no pain

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: He holds her close
And he strokes her cheek
He feels her heartbeat
It makes him weak

He holds him close
And he strokes his cheek
He feels his heartbeat
It makes him weak

He whispers her name
A loving motion
He squeezes her hand
With tender devotion

He whispers his name
A loving motion
He squeezes his hand
With tender devotion

His voice is shaking
As he tells her that line
He utters "I love you"
For the very first time

His voice is shaking
As he tells him that line
He utters "I love you"
For the very first time

The relationship envied
By friends and peers
Neither has to worry
About mocking and fears

The relationship disgraced
By enemies and others
Hate to be afraid
To love one another

Both couples are loving
Both are the same
In yet one has to suffer
While one feels no pain

The last stanza is preachy and superfluous. It causes the poem to lose its power. Please, please be clear that this is not an opinion about your viewpoint. It is a comment on your technique.

Props for originality. It shocked me when you switched it up and made the stanzas opposites of each other, so I guess you succeeded.

This is certainly 1000% original! I think it was brilliantly penned and superbly planned.

A very empathetic look at the 'likeness' of people instead of the difference. I like it.

A well put together poem, with an exception. Jeff is right. Just delete the last stanza, this will improve the poem while still leaving it complete.